Monday, July 3, 2017

Pitch Wars #PimpMyBio 2017 - Adult/Millenial Mystery

Hello Prospective Mentors and Mentees! This is my first time doing Pitch Wars and I'm almost finished with my first novel.

Go crazy?

It's a traditional mystery (amateur sleuth) set at a comic book convention titled Death Comes to ComiKon. The first few chapters have won the 2016 Mystery Writers of America/Helen McCloy Scholarship and also the William F. Deeck - Malice Domestic Grant for Unpublished Writers. I've been working on it for about two years now, and am finally ready to put my baby out there in the world.

I'm not great at blogging (hence my last post being 2+ months old), so there'll be a decided lack of snazzy gifs ( but waaay too many pics).


I was at an anime convention in 2008 or 9, and an actor from a popular 90s children's show drunkenly hit on one of my friends after we asked if he would take a picture with us. It was nowhere near as bad as it happens in my book, but it was rather uncomfortable for my friend. We all laughed it off, but about two years ago, that scene came back to me. The wheels began turning and I started asking myself questions.

That actor was someone we looked up to as children. He was a hero to many children of color. How would it feel to finally meet your childhood hero, only to find out he's a jerk? Why do women, particularly young women, feel the need to laugh off their harassment instead of saying something about it? And finally, what if your childhood hero was murdered at a comic book convention and you became the prime suspect?


After her childhood hero is accused of murdering a washed-up action star at Chicago’s largest comic book convention, Sunshine Salinas (geek girl extraordinaire) must race to find the true killer before her hero is thrown behind bars. If she’s not careful though, she might suffer the same fate, as Chicago PD is all too eager to cast her as the faithful sidekick.


  • I'm an ESL (English as a Second Language) teacher, so I know the importance of criticism and constructive feedback. This also means that my grammar, while not perfect, is the least of my worries.
  • I've pitched several agents, most of whom expressed an interest in my manuscript. This means I'm absolutely serious about putting in the time to make sure my work is polished enough for the query/submission stage in the next few months.
  • I'm very passionate about this story, which I believe is unique and will bring about much-needed diversity in the mystery genre. The majority of the cast belong to marginalized groups (often more than one), but the story isn't ABOUT their marginalization; it's just part of who they are.


  • Pacing. This is important in all stories, but absolutely crucial in mysteries. My story takes place at a 4-day convention, so a lot happens in a short time.
  • Tension/Conflict. I'm very passive aggressive, so this has been a problem for me. Feedback shows that I either pull away from these scenes too quickly instead of really diving in, or I avoid it completely.
  • Voice. My story is in 1st person, and many people say I've got a very strong voice. However, I worry that it's so strong, it carries over to the other characters and everyone all sounds the same.
  • Plot holes. Do my subplots, clues, and red herrings all come together?
  • Sensitivity reading. My story features LGBT+ and disabled characters, and the cast is majority PoC. Do they feel like real characters or do they read as flat/stereotypes/problematic?


  1. I'm fairly introverted. My husband went on a 3-day road trip with friends and I spent that time eating, reading, writing, playing video games, and watching the Great British Baking Show while talking to 0 people. It. Was. Bliss.
    I heart Tamal
  2. I'm a huge geek and have been going to anime/comic book/pop culture conventions since 2005. I'm not big into anime/manga anymore, but I still loooove the older stuff (CardCaptor Sakura and Fruits Basket ftw!)
    I'm not super into shipping, but these matter what incarnation they're in, these two always get me
  3. I taught English in South Korea for 3+ years and currently work in downtown Chicago at a private ESL institute
    Last Day of Class, Yesan Girls' High School 2014
  4. I'm married and (technically) have three dogs. The dog I brought back with me from Korea betrayed me and left me for my father.
    Gumiho (the betrayer), my dad the Dog Whisperer, Bayley Banks, and Max Power
  5. I have two tattoos, with plans for several more
    My First Tattoo = Matching tattoo with a good buddy from Korea

    NC = Non-Compliant symbol from the comic, Bitch Planet
    The quote is from the Kelly Sue DeConnick run of Captain Marvel 
  6. I believe there's a Simpsons quote for everything 
    Look, a GIF!
  7. I'm 30 years old but have the soul of a retiree; nothing makes me happier than a good cup of tea, a pastry, and a cozy mystery/good book
  8. I'm a sucker for female friendships and am SO SICK of the "women hate other women" trope
    These books give me all the feels
  9. My love of JRPGs (Japanese Role Playing Games), particularly the Persona series, makes me long to write a YA coming-of-age story with JRPG tropes. Someday...
    Absolute favorite game series
  10. Wonder Woman is everything (Best part? All these pictures were taken at work at one point or another)
    No seriously
    I'm not playing



  1. Writers - Neil Gaiman, Amy Tan, Jane Austen, Gail Simone (comic book writer)
    My brothers really know me. Best Christmas present
  2. Books - Neverwhere, Pride & Prejudice, The Joy Luck Club, The Sisterhood of the Traveling Pants series, His Dark Materials trilogy, Harry Potter, A Wrinkle in Time, When the Elephants Dance, White Oleander, Little Women, Jane Eyre
    Ravenclaw represent!
  3. Comic Books/Graphic Novels/Manga - Wonder Woman (Gail Simone, George Perez, and Greg Rucka runs), Ms. Marvel (Kamala Khan), Lumberjanes, Bitch Planet, Monstress, Sandman, Fruits Basket, Honey & Clover, Mockingbird, DC Bombshells 
    A Justice League of Their Own? Crying
  4. Music - 90s R&B/Hip Hop/Pop, K-Pop (2004 - 2015, mostly), and Korean hip hop/R&B 
    I miss them so much sometimes
  5. Video Games - Persona 4 Golden (my favorite), Persona series, Phoenix Wright Ace Attorney series, Professor Layton, Mass Effect, Dragon Age 
    I wanna solve a small-town murder mystery with this crew SO BAD
So there you go. Way more info than you'd ever care to know about me. I hope you choose me as your mentee! And if not, I hope to make lots and lots of new writing friends ^^

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